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Part 5 of the story

December 16, 2019 by szachik@pvs.org 50 Comments

By Doreen Yuan

A Review of the Urban-Legend storytelling rules:

1. The comment section is part of the story. All comments are ordered by the number.

2. Comments that include a >> and a number (ex: >>1) are replies to the comment with that number.

3. Anonymous users in the comment section are part of the story. There are multiple anonymous accounts.

4. The main characters named No Longer Human and Curry are part of the story in the comments.

5. Readers can leave messages in the comment section but should not intentionally destroy or try to confuse the coherence of the story.

6. Readers can respond to any anonymous character interaction in the comment section–that response may change and contribute to the story.

7. Do not use inappropriate language.

8. The roles and anonymity in the comment section are created by the primary story author himself.

9. The time of all messages is based on the time of writing.

10. Have fun, and enjoy it.

*This is a continuing story. The last installment was posted December 5, 2019. The story is told through the “Comments” section. Read them carefully.

Editor: Quintus Ni

Filed Under: Fiction Tagged With: Doreen Yuan, Part 5 of the story

Comments

  1. Curry says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:36 pm

    179:Curry (21:00)
    >>That’s a good reason to want to leave, but can’t you think of any better reasons?

    Reply
  2. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:37 pm

    180:Anonymous (19:00)
    >>Well, at least you won’t jinx yourself. If you say something like “I want to get out and marry Curry,” then you won’t be able to come back.

    Reply
  3. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:37 pm

    181:Anonymous (19:01)
    >>179 Curry, just tell No Longer Human to take this more seriously. Chew him out or something.

    Reply
  4. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:38 pm

    182:No Longer Human (20:59)
    I turned on my phone light and walked inside for a while. I haven’t seen anything yet, but I feel the light from the station platform fading. I haven’t gone that far yet. I can’t see the light at the entrance when I turn around. Also, the sound of bells and drums seems to come from the opposite side?? It’s noisy. I’m anxious.

    Reply
  5. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:38 pm

    183:Anonymous (19:01)
    >>182 bells and drums? Wait, the last one in the tunnel didn’t hear bells and drums, right?

    Reply
  6. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:38 pm

    184:Anonymous (19:01)
    >>182 Is his sanity starting to break? Please calm down and get out as soon as possible. Cover your ears if it’s bad.

    Reply
  7. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:39 pm

    185:Anonymous (19:01)
    >>182 Run, No Longer Human!

    Reply
  8. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:39 pm

    186:No Longer Human (20:58)
    >>Well, I can’t run — I’m an intellectual not a coward.

    Reply
  9. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:40 pm

    187:Anonymous (19:02)
    >>Please run.

    Reply
  10. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:41 pm

    188:Anonymous (19:02)
    >>How long do you want to play with this guy??

    Reply
  11. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:43 pm

    189:Anonymous (19:03)
    >>Block up your ears and don’t listen. That noise is a guide to the dead.

    Reply
  12. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:43 pm

    190:Anonymous (19:03)
    >>182 is the power of his phone enough? It’s better to move quickly. If the phone dies halfway, then that’s GG.

    Reply
  13. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:44 pm

    191:Anonymous (19:04)
    >>Even anonymous people are setting up red flags for him.

    Reply
  14. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:44 pm

    192:No Longer Human (20:54)
    >>189 I’ve put bandages on my ears. It’s better not to listen.
    >>190 More than half of my phone’s battery is left; that’s enough~

    Reply
  15. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:45 pm

    193:No Longer Human (20:54)
    But the bells and drums are coming from the direction I’m going. If it’s a sound to guide the dead, I’m going to meet those guys XD

    Reply
  16. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:46 pm

    194:Anonymous (19:05)
    >>I don’t even want to know where you found the bandage…. when your hearing becomes weak, you should be more alert and use visual warnings.

    Reply
  17. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:47 pm

    195:Anonymous (19:05)
    >>193 I’ll check again. No Longer Human, please keep moving. Don’t get distracted by the comments without looking ahead of you!

    Reply
  18. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:47 pm

    196:Anonymous (19:05)
    >>193 How can you say such terrible words so easily….. You are in trouble, and I’m starting to wake up.

    Reply
  19. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:47 pm

    197:Anonymous (19:06)
    >>193 if you can, follow one of the side walls and move quickly.

    Reply
  20. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:49 pm

    198:No Longer Human (20:53)
    I’m starting to get sleepy again

    Reply
  21. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:50 pm

    199:No Longer Human (20:52)
    It’s a lot stronger than the last time

    Reply
  22. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:50 pm

    200:No longer Human (20:52)

    Reply
  23. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:51 pm

    201:Anonymous (19:09)
    >>200 what were you gonna type???

    Reply
  24. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:55 pm

    202:Anonymous (19:09)
    >>200 blank messages? Don’t fall asleep.

    Reply
  25. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:55 pm

    203:Anonymous (19:09)
    >>Are you still alive?!

    Reply
  26. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:56 pm

    204:Anonymous (19:10)
    >>Wake up!!!!!

    Reply
  27. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:56 pm

    205:No longer Human (20:50)
    Calm down, it’s just that it’s so cold in the tunnel that my fingers froze and I dropped my phone on the ground.

    Reply
  28. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:57 pm

    206:No Longer Human (20:49)
    You’re all very concerned about me ~ Oh, I’m so flattered.

    Reply
  29. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:57 pm

    207:Anonymous (19:12)
    >>Don’t scare us… We are closely following your progress with apprehension.

    Reply
  30. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:58 pm

    208:Anonymous (19:12)
    >>206 of course I care, OK?!

    Reply
  31. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:58 pm

    209:Anonymous (19:13)
    >>208 heartbreaking self-deprecation.
    But it’s summer now. Why can’t you hold your phone when it’s cold?

    Reply
  32. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:58 pm

    210:Anonymous (19:13)
    Where’s Curry? Come on, your friend is sleepy again!

    Reply
  33. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:59 pm

    211:No Longer Human (20:46)
    >>210 — did I scare him away?

    Reply
  34. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 9:59 pm

    212:No Longer Human (20:46)
    Haha, it’s not normal to ask strangers to meet up so suddenly. It’s normal to be scared away.

    Reply
  35. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:00 pm

    213:Anonymous (19:15)
    >>205 it’s easier to fall asleep in a cold environment. Once you close your eyes, you’ll fall asleep forever. Hurry up and run to warm your body.
    >>209 It’s probably because of the station. It’s natural that it will be cold in such a gloomy place.

    Reply
  36. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:00 pm

    214:Anonymous (19:16)
    I checked it out, and I learned that in most experiences, the drums come from behind. It’s more like chasing people into Kisaragi station. And I didn’t find anything relevant after that… I’m sorry, I have no clue now.

    Reply
  37. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:01 pm

    215:Anonymous (19:16)
    >>214 isn’t it bad that No Longer Human is walking towards the drums?!

    Reply
  38. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:01 pm

    216:Anonymous (19:16)
    >>214 there is no relevant information after being chased… because the people who were chased didn’t make it out.

    Reply
  39. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:01 pm

    217:Anonymous (19:17)
    >>216 fie fie FIE, it’s unlucky. Please allow me to take back the last message.

    Reply
  40. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:02 pm

    218: No Longer Human (20:43)
    Do you want me to go back now But if I turn around and get out of the tunnel I’ll have to walk along the track into the mountains

    Reply
  41. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:02 pm

    219:Anonymous (19:18)
    >>218 are the sounds still moving towards you? How is your sanity?

    Reply
  42. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:03 pm

    220:Anonymous (19:18)
    >>218 Did you get confused and turn around once you entered the tunnel?

    Reply
  43. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:03 pm

    221:Anonymous (19:19)
    >>He shouldn’t have made such a mistake… Also, for the first time in the world, he didn’t use punctuation marks. What’s the matter?

    Reply
  44. No Longer Human says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:03 pm

    222:No Longer Human (20:41)
    I’m still moving It’s too cold I’m a little dizzy

    Reply
  45. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:04 pm

    223:Anonymous (19:19)
    >>222 Are you ok???

    Reply
  46. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:05 pm

    224:Anonymous (19:19)
    >>222 Please don’t be spooky anymore, I’m really worried.

    Reply
  47. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:05 pm

    225:Anonymous (19:20)
    >>224 I hope he’s just being spooky as a joke. Wasn’t he fine just a minute ago?!

    Reply
  48. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:05 pm

    226:Anonymous (19:20)
    >>222 cheer up!!!

    Reply
  49. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:06 pm

    227:Anonymous (19:21)
    >>If you can’t wake up, slap yourself!

    Reply
  50. Anonymous says

    December 16, 2019 at 10:06 pm

    228:Anonymous (19:21)
    >>It will be warm when you run! Run!
    ———————To be continued

    Reply

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